The dream of a shipyard
made physical by desire
so many’s aspirations
no she could never fall
Joining lands together
families and friends
offering a promise
of life that would be better
A dancing light extinguished
in each one of their eyes
A million piercing daggers
thousands of unanswered cries
Bitter cold and blackness
all that would remain
too cold to feel the loss
survival before pain
Once so majestic
only hours before
White Star’s leading lady
reduced to a common whore
Hundreds of souls left behind
in icy seas to roam,
hundreds more waiting word
from the docks back home
A night so black and moonless
a night to become lost
modern invention at the finest
no matter the cost
Souls that are still searching,
to find a passage through
a hundred and one years later
and explanations are still due
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Great Tribute on the 101 anniversary. Can you imagine the feelings of loved ones separated and never to see each other again. How would it feel sharing last words with the knowledge that they are truly the last? “A night to become lost” says it all. Thank you for this since we all need to think about the tradegy through what you have written about that night to remember.
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Thank you for your kind words John. I appreciate that since I am definitely not a self proclaimed poet.
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You don’t need to self proclaim. The work speaks for you.
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😃Blushing!
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Great job Ionia! I think you got this poetry thing in the bag! 😀
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Hardly but thank you
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Don’t doubt yourself. You’ll make me cry. 😥
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😂I love you man! (What movie is that from?)
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I dunno… it’s on the tip of my brain but I can’t remember 😦
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Check out the magazine Poets & Writers. Many contest listed there. I think this poem would do awesome in one of those competitions. With simple words you have brought back the cries of lost souls and the numbing pain of tragedy. Definitely have a poet side to you!
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You are too kind! Really, I’m not a poet and I know it! By the way thank you again for allowing me to read your book! That kept me up happily past my bedtime last evening:)
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Saying that you’re not good at something is often the first step towards becoming good at it.
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I read everyone else’s poems, it’s good enough for me! 🙂
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I think it has potential for sure (didn’t mean to imply otherwise!) I actually think the layout speaks a lot about the “feel” of it — the lack of punctuation and the line breaks give it something of a despairing theme. Keep up the good work 🙂
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Yeah that was intentional because I knew if I tried to “format” it I would bomb lol. I know as much about poetry as I do nuclear fission:)
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Thank you for your kindness.
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I really love this… the words and the layout work so well…
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Thank you, that means a lot coming from you, who is currently my writing hero
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Ha. Please…no more! 😉
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You can take it you’re a big boy 😉
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I think the formatting is the best part, honestly. The best part about writing poetry is breaking all the “rules”.
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Great poem. I love how you wove the pictures into the poem itself.
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Thank you! I’m shy about my own writing—isn’t that strange considering how much I love to read?
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A little strange, but you don’t have anything to be shy about. I wonder if the shyness for a lot of writers in regards to poetry comes from the expectation to present it to a crowd. That whole image of reading your poetry on a stage can be scary.
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You may have nailed it. When I think of poetry I either think sonnets on stage or coffee house reading. Ooh I was just interrupted by an email telling me immortal wars has shipped;)
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Speaking of shy about one’s writing.
I think of the same thing with poetry. Also, snapping fingers and black shirts for some reason.
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Don’t forget the top hats and canes oh…wait that’s show tunes
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Or Young Frankenstein. 🙂
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No matter what I tell you don’t open this door, and it’s fraankenshteen lol
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Frau Blucher! 🙂
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Lol
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Speechless and moved. Lovely.
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